Well Done Emily! You created a fantastic piece of writing about a brother and sister who were made to tidy up their mess.
You used lots of great description and also created tension with the use of short sentences and interesting actions.
Great Work!
From Miss Aslett.
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Well done for working really hard to achieve a PB ! I bet you are very proud!
Well done Emily for achieving a PB and dragon writer of the week looking forward to seeing you on the blog again.
Well done Emily for achieving a PB. Well done for getting your Big write up on the Blog. Maybe you could be the dragon writter of the week again sometime? You should be so proud of yourself!
Well done Emily for achieving a PB! Keep it up!!
WOW!!! That was great Emily I love you semi colon. I realy think you tryed hard.
Great writing Emily for achieving a PB in your Big Write. As I was reading it I noticed you were using a variety of adjdctives and sentence starters. I bet you are totally proud of your work and next you can achieve to beat your target
Great work Emily! Well done for achieving a PB.In addition, great use of adjectives.
Great work Emily!Keep up with the PBs 🙂
Well done! I wish I could be as good as you. Also I would like to be a dragon writer.
Thanks, guys! It’s lovely to see all your responses 🙂
Well done Emily for a fantastic piece of work. And I see you have used a little bit of ISPACED. nice work Emily keep it up!
Well done it is great PB
I could not of done that. Are you proud of your work.
Brilliant work Emily!
Whilst I was reading your magnificent work, I noticed some excellent adjectives! In addition, I adored your amazing sentence openers.
Congratulations on achieving a P.B (Personal Best) and I hope to see more of your writing on the blog soon! Keep up the great work!
Well done Emily! You have tried really hard with your work – it’s amazing to see the work a year 5 can produce!
From your sister Alice 🙂 😉
Well done I am really impressed!
From her Friend Claudia 🙂 😉
Congratulations! You have tried really hard Emily!
From Jessica J 🙂 😉
Well Done Emily this is a good piece of writing!! 🙂
Well done Emily, you are so talented. It’s nice that you have scored a PB, it’s a very good piece of writing and you’ve tried really hard.
Well done Emily for a amazing piece of writting!!!
Well done Emily this work is stunning! I think you achieved your target (to use ISPACED) and your handwriting is a lot neater than mine will ever be. Keep the excellent work up! 😀