Congratulations to this week’s Star Writers…Elizabeth and Harvey!
Your challenge this week was to write the Natural History Museum in London, describing an unusual creature which you had seen in your garden.
Elizabeth, what I really like about your writing is the way you have impressed me right at the very beginning by using connectives like ‘Furthermore’ and challenging vocabulary such as ‘species’. You go on to use super starters like ‘Rather interestingly’ and the connective ‘Although’. In addition to your vocabulary and sentences, I like your imaginative ideas such as ‘paws like a squirrel’ and the fact it will turn ‘cold blooded’ if you don’t look after it properly.
Harvey, what a super use of brackets to add an aside! I really like the way you’ve used a range of preposition starts, connectives such as ‘However’ and remembered to use a colon for a list. Your creature really stood out as being quite unique! I really like the idea that you have seen your creature eating something in the neighbourhood and details such as it can ‘scream loud enough to burst your eardrums!’ What an excellent description.
Fantastic writing. Keep it up!